July 30th
I went to summer festival with my friend.
We turned many shops.
And,we ate many foods.
For example,we ate Yakitori and Takoyaki.
In addition,we played the game and
taked many pictures.
It's very fun.
We had a good time.
間違ってると思いますが、、
いいと思うよ！でも、すこし変な部分があるかな
I went to the summer festival with my best friend(s).We went around booth and ate some foods like Yakitori or Takoyaki.
We also played some games and took pictures.It was really awesome (to have fun with my best friends.)We had a really good time.
かな
shopsは、すこし変な気がするかな
屋台なら、boothの方がナチュラルだね
For example,we ateは、すこし変な気がするね
例えば！
We ate many foods.
For example ,we ate~なら、
We ate~のほうが自然だよね？
だから、すこし不自然に見えちゃったかな
あとは、the gameって言ったけど、僕たちは、主さんがどんなゲームをしたのかわからないから、主さんがthe gameって書いても、読む人は、??ってなるの。だから、a gameかgamesのほうがいいね。あとは、taked っていう言葉はないよ！tookだねw
結構違った〜すいません笑
あたしも勉強になりました！
ありがとうございます
ありがとうございます!!